you read a dragon's bio of the person above you, and tell them what you thought of the bio.
Rules. please give answers, that are 2 sentences or more.
Don't skip
please claim.
don't be too overly rude if you didnt like it
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I;ll go first
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you read a dragon's bio of the person above you, and tell them what you thought of the bio.
Rules. please give answers, that are 2 sentences or more.
Don't skip
please claim.
don't be too overly rude if you didnt like it
I;ll go first
Short bio
@lordboxman
It is pretty short, but definitely a good starting point. I think some more detail with actual incident could have more of an impact; maybe include some more of Slithe's feelings about the whole thing. I for one want to know about what Slithe is doing as a General. How's his revenge going? The bio is definitely intriguing! (Also, he is so pretty! That jaguar is striking with his eyes)
What about my dragon, Bluehour? (Hers is maybe a bit long, sorry!)
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lordboxman
It is pretty short, but definitely a good starting point. I think some more detail with actual incident could have more of an impact; maybe include some more of Slithe's feelings about the whole thing. I for one want to know about what Slithe is doing as a General. How's his revenge going? The bio is definitely intriguing! (Also, he is so pretty! That jaguar is striking with his eyes)
What about my dragon, Bluehour? (Hers is maybe a bit long, sorry!)
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@Mertisal
I actually really like Bluehour's lore- because you get to learn a LOT about her personality and how she treats others. The way you've written her lore paints a very realistic and (dare I say it) almost 'logical' picture of Bluehour. You can tell that she always took what others said in her former home with a grain of salt (or maybe she just didn't care), and was independent enough to go out on her own- traits that once again show when describing what her life's like in the present. I honestly think this is a really well-written piece of lore.
A+ lore please teach me ur lore ways
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Anyone wanna read my smoll suffering child's lore?
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Mertisal
I actually really like Bluehour's lore- because you get to learn a LOT about her personality and how she treats others. The way you've written her lore paints a very realistic and (dare I say it) almost 'logical' picture of Bluehour. You can tell that she always took what others said in her former home with a grain of salt (or maybe she just didn't care), and was independent enough to go out on her own- traits that once again show when describing what her life's like in the present. I honestly think this is a really well-written piece of lore.
A+ lore please teach me ur lore ways
Anyone wanna read my smoll suffering child's lore?
@AestheticToaster
That was pretty dark there! "Smoll suffering child" was right. I liked reading it in the sense that I haven't seen something like it before, but it made me a little sad. The idea that one is not enough for others is an abyss that is hard to drag yourself out of. I feel for the the poor boy, but he really needs some help! Save him, somebody! (At least you had the warning, but I didn't even really notice it until I looked specifically at the abilities)
Aside from the lore, I like the little ability things he has! So, cutting his own eyes out did make him a bit better at something, but I don't think that seeing poison is worth never seeing anything else.
I would say to spell out numbers though. That might make it look a little better, but the staggering really sells the panic that he feels.
Finally, what is the triangle thing? (Pentachoron?)
Claim!
Perhaps this lady?
[url=http://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=41544700]
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AestheticToaster
That was pretty dark there! "Smoll suffering child" was right. I liked reading it in the sense that I haven't seen something like it before, but it made me a little sad. The idea that one is not enough for others is an abyss that is hard to drag yourself out of. I feel for the the poor boy, but he really needs some help! Save him, somebody! (At least you had the warning, but I didn't even really notice it until I looked specifically at the abilities)
Aside from the lore, I like the little ability things he has! So, cutting his own eyes out did make him a bit better at something, but I don't think that seeing poison is worth never seeing anything else.
I would say to spell out numbers though. That might make it look a little better, but the staggering really sells the panic that he feels.
Finally, what is the triangle thing? (Pentachoron?)
Claim!
Perhaps this lady?
@Gula First off the bio looks really pretty!!! Good job formatting.
As for her lore itself, I found it a bit bare but from it, you can tell she's a fearsome but just leader. It's good that you show her sense of morality it also shows why other dragons would want to follow the great Khan-
Are you ever planning to do more story based lore or would you just want to keep the basic summary would be my only question after reading her bio. I know I tend to go with my dragons basic history on how they got to the lair. I try to portray their personality through the story instead of listing it out, makes it a bit easier to read IMO <3
Let's see what somebody thinks of my ME dragon and if you don't mind also giving me your thoughts on the formatting? I kinda winged it
[url=http://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=26702417]
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Gula First off the bio looks really pretty!!! Good job formatting.
As for her lore itself, I found it a bit bare but from it, you can tell she's a fearsome but just leader. It's good that you show her sense of morality it also shows why other dragons would want to follow the great Khan-
Are you ever planning to do more story based lore or would you just want to keep the basic summary would be my only question after reading her bio. I know I tend to go with my dragons basic history on how they got to the lair. I try to portray their personality through the story instead of listing it out, makes it a bit easier to read IMO <3
Let's see what somebody thinks of my ME dragon and if you don't mind also giving me your thoughts on the formatting? I kinda winged it
@LadyIzo
Her bio is so sad! I want to know what she did while she was tangled up. Did she eat? What did she eat? Did the Guide stick around, or take off afterwards? Did she get out, or is she still there? :O
It's good that I want to know more. :)
I love the color scheme and formatting seems good to me! Everything lines up quite well!
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Okay, who wants to read about Grudge? :D
(Haven't made his bio pretty, but the words paint pictures, do they not?)
[url=http://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=33845579]
[img]http://flightrising.com/rendern/350/338456/33845579_350.png[/img]
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LadyIzo
Her bio is so sad! I want to know what she did while she was tangled up. Did she eat? What did she eat? Did the Guide stick around, or take off afterwards? Did she get out, or is she still there? :O
It's good that I want to know more. :)
I love the color scheme and formatting seems good to me! Everything lines up quite well!
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Okay, who wants to read about Grudge? :D
(Haven't made his bio pretty, but the words paint pictures, do they not?)
@Starbrite
honestly, I found his bio pretty amusing, and creative. I love how he is is this goofy looking dragon, whom everyone laughs about his look behind his back. Except he's serious dragon. Remind me never to ask him for advice. I'd probably get a goofy response.
Well this went from, "Aww, he surprisingly cute" to "Spooky" This dragon has taught my a value listen. Don't understand snappers. Snappers may look adorable, but they will kill you, and crush your bones. I actually like that about him, I like fierce and powerful dragons.
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[url=http://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=42126168]
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Starbrite
honestly, I found his bio pretty amusing, and creative. I love how he is is this goofy looking dragon, whom everyone laughs about his look behind his back. Except he's serious dragon. Remind me never to ask him for advice. I'd probably get a goofy response.
Well this went from, "Aww, he surprisingly cute" to "Spooky" This dragon has taught my a value listen. Don't understand snappers. Snappers may look adorable, but they will kill you, and crush your bones. I actually like that about him, I like fierce and powerful dragons.
slightly upgraded my boi's tiny bio.
@LordBoxman
I like his lore! I look forward to seeing him dress up like a big bad boy and succeed at burning his enemies to the ground.
[url=http://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=29096926]
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I'll be a decent human being today and not make the next person read Azael's ridiculous amount of lore. Instead you get McKenzie! (it's mixed in there with some Lorum ipsum and in his notes)
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LordBoxman
I like his lore! I look forward to seeing him dress up like a big bad boy and succeed at burning his enemies to the ground.
I'll be a decent human being today and not make the next person read Azael's ridiculous amount of lore. Instead you get McKenzie! (it's mixed in there with some Lorum ipsum and in his notes)
@TheGodOfStories
I love the whole part about covering up his runes -- it paints a better picture of the whole 'self-conscious of his blood' part ^^ he seems like a very likable pirate!
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[url=http://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=26186761]
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I just finished Wail's lore and would love some feedback (it's not great, but at least I gathered up the patience to write it :P )
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TheGodOfStories
I love the whole part about covering up his runes -- it paints a better picture of the whole 'self-conscious of his blood' part ^^ he seems like a very likable pirate!
I just finished Wail's lore and would love some feedback (it's not great, but at least I gathered up the patience to write it :P )
@Shiningbreeze
I really like it! You have a knack for introducing the dragon's character, I got a good feel for her! I really like how you expressed Wail's feelings towards Theresea being her charge, I could almost feel her frustration!
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It was hard to pick from my lore dragons, but Rei here has always been one of my favorites to write, enjoy! (Sorry it's kinda long and sad xD)
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Shiningbreeze
I really like it! You have a knack for introducing the dragon's character, I got a good feel for her! I really like how you expressed Wail's feelings towards Theresea being her charge, I could almost feel her frustration!
It was hard to pick from my lore dragons, but Rei here has always been one of my favorites to write, enjoy! (Sorry it's kinda long and sad xD)