Flight Rising Discussion

Honestly, I've been so down lately in relation to my lore that I can't help but wanting to read other people's lore instead. In fact, I don't think mine is good at all compared to other's which get more praise.
Care to talk about your clan lore? I want to read it, read anything right now

you can read my Clan lore since it's all in my profile description c: in a nutshell, mine is basically a runaway Clan, used to be a trading hub with lots of merchants and economy, but then BoTE happened and they got attacked on all fronts, forcing the members to retreat to the bottom of the ocean :V they were namely rescued by Dark Matter, a mysterious Imperial who literally came out of nowhere and led them down there, and continues to lead them. he's asocial, quiet, a bit anxious, and no one knows where he came from or what his past is, but he leads decently well so nobody minds :)

I don't really have clan lore, just lore for individual dragons some of whom interact with each other. I build it from "what's funny/interesting/memorable to me" and then stick that on a dragon, and it's mostly all lighthearted/slice of life because that's what I'd rather spend my time on. If you want to poke around my lair tab feel free to, none of them have a ton of lore but most have a little. If you're ready to think about yours again [quote]I don't think mine is good at all compared to others[/quote] For what it's worth, that's actually a sign you're improving as a writer. Stages of learning a new skill: sucking > knowing you suck > sucking less > etc. I know the feeling though, it's why I'm still terrible at drawing even though I know I could improve by just... doing it and sucking at it. Also your lore isn't all that bad, good content and only a few grammar errors/awkward phrasing that I see. Rather than agonize over trying to write better, my recommendation for how to improve is actually just read other stuff. Read enough books or well-written fanfiction or whathaveyou and you'll subconsciously absorb how to choose words/construct sentences/build a plot/etc. even without paying attention to 'how is it [i]written[/i]' (though you can do that). Just read and eventually you'll write better. Keep going, you'll get there. And the fact that you've written [i]anything[/i] puts you above every single person with fantastic characters and gripping plot ideas that only exist in the would-be authors' heads :)

I've got not a lot of lore, and it's not super well written either. :P
basically, a dragon fled from her role as an heir to an empire in its darkest time, and now the burden of that act has finally caught up with her. So she's pretty much going insane and if she stays in one place too long, she starts to think her grief and regret seep into that area, tainting it in her eyes forever and forcing her to leave or else she must face her burden. So she's constantly travelling in an attempt to escape herself. slowly, more and more dragons started following her, until it became a small clan of wanderers following a mental leader whose slowly losing herself.

[quote name="@sockmonkeygerald" date="2019-10-30 20:41:37" ] I don't really have clan lore, just lore for individual dragons some of whom interact with each other. I build it from "what's funny/interesting/memorable to me" and then stick that on a dragon, and it's mostly all lighthearted/slice of life because that's what I'd rather spend my time on. If you want to poke around my lair tab feel free to, none of them have a ton of lore but most have a little. [/Quote] Oh, I really like Solomundee! Where did his reptile and amphibian obsession (?) came from? He's covered in them. [Quote] For what it's worth, that's actually a sign you're improving as a writer. Stages of learning a new skill: sucking > knowing you suck > sucking less > etc. Also your lore isn't all that bad, good content and only a few grammar errors/awkward phrasing that I see. Rather than agonize over trying to write better, my recommendation for how to improve is actually just read other stuff. Read enough books or well-written fanfiction or whathaveyou and you'll subconsciously absorb how to choose words/construct sentences/build a plot/etc. even without paying attention to 'how is it [i]written[/i]' (though you can do that). Just read and eventually you'll write better. [/quote] I am no writer, and there's no way I'll become one after having an assigned talent for so long. And the fact that I was once insulted for my grammar that I was proud of knowing so far (not by you or anyone here) and overall not being perfect in written English is one of the reasons why my written lore sucks and crumbles to my eyes; people won't take it or me seriously if there is even the tiniest grammar error. I am also becoming upset because I am losing my sense of where to properly put a comma without making a sentence awkward. English grammar, sentence building and grammar rules are different from my native language that I subconsciously am distancing myself from, and I am in the point where I don't know how to keep a consistent string of sentence without spamming commas. ------ @DarkMatterDragon Sounds interesting and opens opportunities for something deeper. Where did Dark Matter come from? What makes him asocial? What are his motives?

I've got a lot of lore, but I'm pretty sure it's not as tight-together as I want. And every few months I think I want to scrap it all and start over. But if it makes you feel better, I think lore is always one of those things that's something of a work in progress. It's a lot easier to buy dragons than it is to write for them. [quote]people won't take it or me seriously if there is even the tiniest grammar error[/quote] If it makes you feel any better, I think this [i]isn't[/i] true for most people. I am an editor, and I have a really hard time turning off that part of my brain when I read anything. It's really annoying actually, because I'd like to go back to being able to read for fun and it's something I'm working on. But, anyways, that being said... take it from me: most people for whom English is their first and/or only language don't know how to use it properly. It's just been my experience. And most of the people around here, while good writers, are just here to [i]have fun[/i]. You can tell, because, obviously, it's not professional. And I, for one, love that. There's a big difference between messing around, practicing for fun on Flight Rising and writing a peer-reviewed journal paper. Obviously. I wouldn't have guessed that you weren't a native speaker from your vocabulary and the way you're writing. Most native English speakers [i]do[/i] have run-ons and comma splices all over the place, especially when they're first writing fiction. Heck, even ten years after they've been writing fiction. If we write like we speak (and that's what writing's ultimately for, far as I can see), then it's going to happen. Nobody's perfect. Even the people who insult other people's grammar. Grammar's (especially if you're writing on forums or fiction) it's not supposed to be perfect. Anyways. Sorry about that minor rant there. My lore! My clan is basically one big-huge clan of [url=https://www1.flightrising.com/lair/96931]nomadic monster hunters[/url]. They hire themselves out to deal with monsters, and might sometimes agree to fight in wars between dragons or dragons and Beastclans. I have started making a [url=https://www1.flightrising.com/lair/96931/1476105]few monsters[/url] in my lair for them to have long-term battles with... but I don't think I can reasonable expect myself to actually write a full-fledged story about it, though I'm sort-of trying. They also escort or otherwise protect [url=https://www1.flightrising.com/lair/96931/1478970]dragons or Beasts[/url] that aren't as strong or wily. Basically everyone outside of the Hibernal Den has lore of some kind. I'm more-or-less trying to connect everyone together in some way so that one story might lead to another, but keeping this web of connections that seems sort-of clear in my head is hard to keep straight when I'm actually trying to do the writing. But, most of the time, I just roll the dice to decide which dragons are buddies. Friendships and work relationships are sometimes just a stroke of fate. But, if you're looking for something specific to read, [url=https://flightrising.com/main.php?dragon=44760758]Typics[/url] is my most-recently "finished" bio. I say "finished" because I haven't written his sister's yet, so I don't know what to do with his relationships and whatnot. And the familiar I picked for him makes me think it'd be cool if he was trying to build up this massive Wind-golem army, but I didn't come up with that idea until too-late. But, you know. It's a work in progress.

[Quote] I am in the point where I don't know how to keep a consistent string of sentence without spamming commas. [/quote] Heck, as a native English speaker I can't figure this out either. I can't seem to avoid run on sentences :P Considering just how irrational the English grammatical system is, I've always been impressed by people that learn it as a second language. And the only thing about your commas that seems off to me is that there occasionally isn't a space after them, which I find is a very common typo? All in all, I think your writing is quite well done since it's not your native language. [emoji=coatl happy size=2] Anyone that insults that grammar is clearly rude and wrong; you have plenty reason to be proud of figuring out this funky language.

@SolifugeSpace

One of my friends told me of this idea they have about leveling up. When their hands are a higher level than their eyes, then they feel like they draw or write really well. When their eyes level up before their hands, nothing they make seems good enough. It seems to all be about perspective!

Here is my clan lore. A few of my dragons also have lore. I dont really know if I am any good at writing either. I just like doing it even if I mess up a whole bunch. I do know people that use a lot of commas, but sometimes thats what you need.

When it comes to grammar, it doesnt matter if it is proper just if it is understandable. Language is being able to understand and reason beyond the immediate, so, as long as you are understood, that is good enough in my book.

@SolifugeSpace there IS more to Dark Matter's lore that I have in my head, i just don't like sharing it online because it's supposed to be a seeeecret :') however, i will say that trauma and sickness are involved in his past, and it's what lead to him being asocial and wanting to save a seemingly random Water Clan

as of now, the Clan can only rely on rumors floating around, plus they know he was born in the Shifting Expanse due to his element. the most popular theory/rumor/myth for the Clan to explain his backstory is that he was a regular Lightning dragon growing up, working on a lightning farm in the Shifting Expanse, before one day he was struck by lightning and granted extraordinary magic abilities by the Stormcatcher. he was then rumored to have been sent by the Stormcatcher himself on a journey to the Sea of a Thousand Currents.

Why Stormcatcher sent him is a disputed part of the story: some say the Stormcatcher wanted to test the dragon he had picked. Some say the Stormcatcher was told by Tidelord (who can foresee the future) that BoTE would happen, so he powered up one of his most promising dragons and sent him there to try to protect the Sea. Some say the Stormcatcher didn't send him to the Sea at all, and just wanted to send him away to protect the world in general, with Dark Matter ending up in the Sea of a Thousand Currents just as BoTE happens. All the ways end the same, with Dark Matter betraying the Stormcatcher by running away with a rogue Water Clan and instead dedicating his life to them.

all in all, he's almost regarded as a deity or king - one with humble origins, then a powerful awakening. and though some don't really trust him to this day, they still have to admit that he's done nothing but good for the Clan. of course there are a few conspiracy theorists who guess that Dark Matter has ulterior motives for the Clan, which honestly he very well could, but he hasn't done anything suspicious as of late.